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12/5/2007 12:11:45 PM

booker

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Para 3 edited

The procession begins with the deities taken out from the temple and installed in their respective chariots. Right through this ritual, there are rhythmic movements to the beating of drums and chanting of prayers by devotees. Once the deities are installed, the King of Puri sweeps the chariot with a golden broom. Then the rath is pulled by thousands of devotees and taken to the Gundicha temple. This sight, where mass devotion reaches crescendo, is truly the highlight of your stay in Puri.

12/13/2007 9:40:24 PM

Chillimentor

25 posts

Re: Para 3 edited

Rating: 2.5/5

Comments: The content has not improved too much in terms of quality. I liked the last sentence though.

Suggestions: Rewriting content alone might not qualify as good editing. What a good editor must do is weed out all the errors and make sure the content flows smoothly. This is a good effort but there is definitely room for improvement.

booker wrote